jakez
Investigator
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Post by jakez on Apr 2, 2008 10:38:03 GMT -6
self explanitary
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Kumog
Hunter
[glow=orange,5,150]Master Soloist[/glow]
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Post by Kumog on Apr 3, 2008 14:43:44 GMT -6
OK, after looking at your posts, I have this to say.
You should not ever make a Tales and Stories thread using netspeak and without a semblance of grammar. It looks atrocious and makes people not want to read at all.
Try to make it feel more like a story than just you going "Went training, whee, talked to a clock." Perhaps, something like "My first attempt at investigations were riddled with Chaotic attacks, but I grew stronger from fending them off, eventually finding a strange clock that, upon examining closer, seemed to impart wisdom upon me."
Using Smilies in it also does not feel appropriate. Now if this were a journal entry type story, it could possibly be done, although this doesn't feel like a journal entry at all, just incomprehensible garble.
Try rewriting your posts to where they aren't ugly looking, don't use faked logs in it of a battle (Instead, try describing the effects of the spells that were cast. Did your Ice2 encase Vallatio's head in ice?) That would make it much more enjoyable to read, and probably more fun to write than "jakez - ice2 val - 1en6 damage"
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